May 10th, 2008
|rsgamesmods||10:27 pm - Fic - Team MWPP - Toujours Pur|
Title: Toujours Pur
Team: Marauders Era
Warnings: Sexually suggestive language
Summary: When Sirius leaves home for good, it's not James he goes to first.
Prompt: 3. "It's the friends you can call up at four a.m. that
matter." (Marlene Dietrich)
Genre(s): Angst, Fluff/Romance
Dang, I love this story so much I wish I can vote! I love your imagery and the fantastically neat way you've ended the story. Makes me go "Sighhhhhhhhhh" in a good way.
With stories like this? We are so totally going to win this thing!
And I agree with your first commenter - I love the peace and contentedness of the ending.team_mwpp FTW!
Oh, wow, this is beautiful. The awkwardness between them is really adorable - you perfectly capture the awful, exhilarating anxiousness of falling for someone. Definitely one of the best fics I've read so far for this.
Amazing job - we're lucky to have you on our team! (Too bad I can't vote, though...)
Oh, this is so, so beautiful! Your descriptions are so vivid and lovely -- all of that teenaged angst and longing really comes alive.
|Date:||May 11th, 2008 04:34 am (UTC)|| |
Oh, so lovely! The longing and the pacing were great. And it felt really fresh. *sigh* GO TEAM!!!
Oh, lovely. The ending was so beautifully comfortable. You write very well!
Beautifully written! The only thing that bothered me was one paragraph written in the past tense, in the beginning, which contrasts with the rest of the fic since it is set in the present tense. But hey, that's just a little thing. The fic itself is awesome.
*does the cabbage patch* dude with stuff like this we are going to kick butt and take names :D.
This was cute and sweet. You did a wonderful job with your prompt. Way to go homes.
I love this--it's sweet and perfect, and I have to say I really, really like your descriptions of the weather in here. I know that sounds a bit weird, but, it's definitely one of those things that brings a fic to life. Excellent job!
So perfect. I love seeing this side to Sirius, that we don't see very often... and I love that Remus is the one that does get to see it.
I especially loved this:
As he says, "Thank you," Sirius drapes an arm around Remus, casually, as though it is the most natural act he's capable of performing. Remus stops breathing for what feels like ten years, until he feels Sirius' body press against his own; Sirius' forehead fits into the nape of his neck and he can't comprehend how Sirius does it, how he simply is, how this does absolutely nothing to him.
Lovely fic! Great use of the prompt! I melted over these lines:
"When Sirius grins, Remus knows he'll be alright. It's the same grin, like Sirius knows the secrets of the universe and keeps them in his smile."
I love the R/S Games! This is the most fun a person can have while at their computer!