October 31st, 2009
|rsgamesmods||01:33 pm - Day 31 – Fic: Team Canon: And Many Happy Returns|
Title: And Many Happy Returns
Rating: Hard R
Warnings: oral sex, masturbation
Genre: Drama, Romance
Word Count: ~5,223
Summary: Sirius has a choice to make, his love for Remus tips the scales.
Prompt: Pink: Sexuality/Love
Author’s Note: Boy did this not want to get written. I managed to bludgeon it into submission with the help of my betas B and A. Thank you ladies so very much. According to the lexicon, Sirius leaves home first, and then the Prank happens. This takes place before all of that.
And Many Happy Returns
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I liked this a lot -- it's a different take on Sirius running away from home than I've ever seen before. I really like how you alluded to their physical intimacy over the summer and showed how betrayed Remus felt that Sirius could treat him this way after the trust they'd established.
And the shower scene was hot. Good lord. ;-)
Thank you! I'm glad it was a different take, that's hard to do in a ship so well covered by so many fabulous authors. Makes me really happy, to be honest.
Poor Remus did feel betrayed (I'm rarely nice to Sirius' love interest but I always give them a Sirius in the end so hopefully that makes up for it).
And thank you, I'm glad the shower scene pleased. Very fun to write. My beta teased me because my other two pieces for the games were basically smut free which for me is just weird.
Thank you for this lovely review!!
that was really wonderful. i think that you did a fine job showing sirius's struggles with family, etc. james was awesome, too, and his defensiveness of remus was really quite touching. but the shower scene? damn. that was freaking hot!
Oh thank you so much!! Glad the shower scene was a hit!!
I love this! I was wondering what the issue was with Sirius and read eagerly to find out what could make him be
such a twat so guarded and guilty around Remus.
And ohh, it would take a sharp butcher knife to cut the sexual tension between the two of them. You satisfied it so deliciously too.
And I love the way they all communicate without speaking, especially Sirius in the end. He simply couldn't leave Remus.
He was a twat, wasn't he? I swear I'm happiest when Sirius is an ass.
Glad the tension is working, I meant it to be thick, almost explosive so that when they came together, they simply couldn't stop themselves.
Yes, I quite liked my fluffy ending here. Hee!
Thank you for this review!!
|Date:||November 1st, 2009 07:38 pm (UTC)|| |
I love this. Your writing is so lush, and the first half had me entranced, and I just love this dreamy, invasive quality of your prose - it is like you see every bit of them, but you aren't sharing it all with your readers, and I really, really loved that.
The UST is done so prettily, and oh Sirius, my poor love. His nobility (not blood, but personality) shines through, and this little angst-tantrum is so well-justified, and does not feel silly or over-orchestrated at all. I love James too, of course, and Remus, oh. ♥ Your characterization is spot on, and the resolution is lovely, although I want to cry just thinking about what lies ahead. ( I am sorry, I sponge about this bit of canon all the damn time, especially when I read fics as tender and as good as yours.)
And the shower scene - Ditto what everyone else here has said. Oh, language kink, I love you. And telling someone you want them to fuck you in French? Total win.
Thank you for this gem, love!
This review made me so happy!! I did keep the POV very strictly on Remus so that the reader could feel his frustrations. He does sort of feel like he has been dropped into some other reality where everything has been turned on its ear and nothing makes sense at all.
I was wary of making Remus explode in his angst tantrum, I tried to build it up so that when he snapped, it felt justified and basically forced the truth out of Sirius. He is being noble, and also a little cowardly and a bit of an ass, but his reasons are good. It is his execution that lacks finesse. But he's 15/16 here, and despite all the hype of Sirius Black, 15/16 is as 15/16 does.
I'm so pleased the shower scene works so well. And yes, language kink? I've one of those too!!
Thank you so much for this review!!
This was quite lyric and beautiful. You created such fantastic tension, both sexual and emotional. Even with all his faults and failings, Sirius was a very compelling and oddly likable character and Remus was a darling dream.
Thank you so much!! I'm really glad it worked for you!!
I really, really enjoyed this entry even though it is painful. Their longing was a palpable thing here. And I like how neither boy is really at fault. Sirius has valid reasons for why he was going to try to go along with his parent's plans even while Remus was correct in believing that he was owed explanations. I especially liked that your Remus is not a complete push over who will blindly accept anything to be liked.
Like the leaves, he will fall away, pass into the obscurity of affections past and try to move forward, try to be hopeful that if nothing else their friendship will survive the inevitable awkwardness.
An impossible ache of longing and confusion burns brightly in his gut. He still craves Sirius Black, that lovely, ferocious blend of man and boy makes him feel hungry in ways that are fresh and raw.
Kicking at the leaves at his feet, Remus turns off the path, heading now up toward the castle. He deserves an answer at the very least; they have been friends long enough, been through enough to demand that much respect. If nothing else, Remus Lupin will be seen and heard.
Then of course, there is the beautiful quality of your writing itself. The way you express your tale is a wonder of it's own. And your love scenes vibrate with tension, longing and sweet, young love without being just about porn. Lovely job, oh mystery author!
In the coming months in their story, Sirius is going to have quite enough fault without me putting extra onto his shoulders, you know. I wanted a story with a conflict that was outside of their control, something they had to contend with.
I don't care much for stories when one is discernibly weaker than the other. Sirius IS my favorite, but that doesn't mean that Remus has to just take whatever is being dished out to him. In canon he does speak up, but he often needs a push to get there, and I think I gave him reasons to speak up for himself.
And too, a relationship is and is not a friendship, the dynamic works differently, you have different expectations then you might with a friend. I set it up so that Remus spends a lot of time wondering WTF before he finally just has had enough. I think we can all relate to being there a time or two.
And your love scenes vibrate with tension, longing and sweet, young love without being just about porn.
Thank you very much. I'm glad that all of this comes through. They got pushed to a put when turning back wasn't option, but it wasn't just about the sex, it was about togetherness.
Thank you so much for this lovely review!!